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the cookie i could have beat - @)) Drabble

Post by themorg » Fri Dec 18, 2009 9:27 am

The cookie i could have beat?
by Morgan Olson

"Are these cookies I have been eating,” I wondered all night?
The texture of crackers that set out for a fortnight.
The funny red glow that spoke with a Russian accent.
"Eat John, not me, comrade" as it rumbled the cracks in my head
So I chose the gray cookie with only a little dread.
It tasted square and round as they moved down my GI tract.
I am sure the worms inside me will not give it back.
With all the effort and dirt ahead
I am sure my emotions are not what make me bloated or covered in red.

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Re: the cookie i could have beaten - Drabble

Post by themorg » Fri Dec 18, 2009 9:32 am

thanks to ROU Killing Time telling norm
ROU Killing Time wrote:good to see you down in the drabble-dungeon. Have a cookie
without such inspiration i might get sleep at night
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Post by strawman » Fri Dec 18, 2009 10:55 am

Drabblecast Episode 92 Synesthesia by J Alan Pierce
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

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Re: the cookie i could have beaten - Drabble

Post by ROU Killing Time » Fri Dec 18, 2009 3:42 pm

I like the abstract tone of this one (and the communist cookie gave me a big laugh.) It could do from having a red-penning for some minor grammatic and spelling issues, but it certainly merits a polish pass. (for instance, "synesthesia" should be lower case.) Nice example of using life-experience (or the experience of your room-mate) to come up with a story.

Good job, keep drabbling.
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Post by Algernon Sydney is Dead » Fri Dec 18, 2009 8:10 pm

Ditto.

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Post by themorg » Sat Dec 19, 2009 12:36 am

strawman wrote:Drabblecast Episode 92 Synesthesia by J Alan Pierce
i have not gotten through the archive and only have gotten back to 101 i'll listen to it soon
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Re: the cookie i could have beaten - Drabble

Post by ROU Killing Time » Sat Dec 19, 2009 10:54 am

themorg wrote:
strawman wrote:Drabblecast Episode 92 Synesthesia by J Alan Pierce
i have not gotten through the archive and only have gotten back to 101 i'll listen to it soon
It is zombilicious.
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Post by Phenopath » Sat Dec 19, 2009 12:38 pm

ROU Killing Time wrote:
themorg wrote:
strawman wrote:Drabblecast Episode 92 Synesthesia by J Alan Pierce
i have not gotten through the archive and only have gotten back to 101 i'll listen to it soon
It is zombilicious.
Its more zombilicious than synesthesistastic.

This drabble is different, with a little polish it would join this list of forum drabbles that I would like to hear Norm have a crack at (this and META-BRAINS)
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Re: the cookie i could have beaten - Drabble

Post by themorg » Sun Dec 20, 2009 3:17 am

thanks i appreciate that.
i heard a really funny zombie joke

What is more scary than a zombie

a zombie on a segway.
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Post by themorg » Sun Dec 20, 2009 8:22 am

Phenopath wrote:
Its more zombilicious than synesthesistastic.

This drabble is different, with a little polish it would join this list of forum drabbles that I would like to hear Norm have a crack at (this and META-BRAINS)
now it is more Zombie-undead-communist-war-machine-ilicious

also what is Meta brains?
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Post by ROU Killing Time » Sun Dec 20, 2009 11:26 am

themorg wrote:
Phenopath wrote:
Its more zombilicious than synesthesistastic.

This drabble is different, with a little polish it would join this list of forum drabbles that I would like to hear Norm have a crack at (this and META-BRAINS)
now it is more Zombie-undead-communist-war-machine-ilicious

also what is Meta brains?
Meta-Brain
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Re: the cookie i could have beat (Revised) - Drabble

Post by themorg » Mon Dec 21, 2009 8:31 pm

http://gizmodo.com/022191/toshiba-meta-brain-television" onclick="window.open(this.href);return false
is this the Meta-Brain you were talking about.
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Re: the cookie i could have beaten - Drabble

Post by ROU Killing Time » Mon Dec 21, 2009 8:59 pm

Meta-Brain <-- click this link
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Re: the cookie i could have beaten - Drabble

Post by themorg » Wed Dec 23, 2009 11:21 pm

ROU Killing Time wrote:Meta-Brain <-- click this link
it was really good and fun to read once i understood it was a link. thanks again
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Re: the cookie i could have beat (Revised) - Drabble

Post by tbaker2500 » Thu Dec 31, 2009 6:20 am

Hee hee, nice drabble!
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Re: the cookie i could have beat (Revised) - Drabble

Post by ROU Killing Time » Thu Dec 31, 2009 11:40 am

tbaker2500 wrote:Hee hee, nice drabble!
Portland sure is full of some strange people. :) I liked the revision.
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