Gone Missing

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Gone Missing

Post by eric_marsh » Sat Jan 02, 2010 4:27 pm

While a billion people watched, singer Nancy Stillman disappeared. One moment she was performing and then she was gone.

There had been rumors of such things before but now the disappearances were on everybody's lips. Speculation was rampant.

Tom was exploring Titan's lakes when the world vanished. He found himself in an immense room. People hung in rows of transparent tubes.

Dirty man-like creatures pulled him roughly from his tube. Tom saw several of the creatures crouched around a small fire, eating what appeared to be human limbs. He didn't see the blow coming that sent him spinning into darkness.
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Post by eric_marsh » Sat Jan 02, 2010 4:39 pm

This is the other "Matrix" idea that I mentioned in my previous post.
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Re: Gone Missing

Post by strawman » Sat Jan 02, 2010 6:12 pm

Nice drabble, but I don't get it: is Nancy Cab's wife?
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Post by eric_marsh » Sat Jan 02, 2010 6:15 pm

strawman wrote:Nice drabble, but I don't get it: is Nancy Cab's wife?
Naw - just a name. The story needed a high profile disappearance. The name Nancy came to me followed by Sinatra and that wouldn't work. So I fished around in my head for a last name and Calloway came up. I didn't expect it to be associated in this context with the real Cab Calloway. But since it did happen I changed her name to Stillman.
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Re: Gone Missing

Post by ROU Killing Time » Sat Jan 02, 2010 6:39 pm

strawman wrote:Nice drabble, but I don't get it: is Nancy Cab's wife?
haha, you become Tweedy's apprentice and already posted your first "I don't get it" response. :)
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Post by strawman » Sat Jan 02, 2010 7:23 pm

And now that her name has been changed to stillman, I gotta wonder: "Who the hell is Nancy Stillman?"
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Post by eric_marsh » Sat Jan 02, 2010 7:33 pm

OK - I think that does it. I identified Nancy as a singer and changed her name back to Calloway, who was a great singer and showman.
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Post by Phenopath » Sun Jan 03, 2010 1:05 am

I preferred Stillman
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Post by eric_marsh » Sun Jan 03, 2010 1:47 am

OK - Stillman then. :)
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Post by Mr. Tweedy » Sun Jan 03, 2010 3:37 am

I don't like this one nearly as well as the other. I don't think I would have understood what was going on without the context of the other drabble or the explicit Matrix reference. What's confusing is the tangential references to the occupations of the various characters. Tom is an astronaut exploring Titan, and we naturally think that what happens to him has something to do with his occupation, but it doesn't. Ditto for Nancy. The creatures are described as looking primitive, but that also has nothing to do with their activities.

Basically, I feel like you've got three full-scaled red herrings in the piece, and that's a lot of herring for 100 words. If I didn't come in having pre-gotten it, I'm pretty sure I'd be left scratching my head trying to figure out what an astronaut, a singer and cannibal cavemen have to do with each other.
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Post by ROU Killing Time » Sun Jan 03, 2010 11:10 am

Bringing up herring this close to PAINGUIN's demise is just cruel.

Too soon, too soon.

You're a mean one, Mr. Tweeds...

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Post by strawman » Sun Jan 03, 2010 12:23 pm

I didn't want to bring this up, but Painguin lost by 9 votes. In the first month of balloting, Painguin was running away with the contest, and the balloting on the forum had him leading 6-2-2. At that point the poll "became inoperative". I'm not saying that is proof of Hanky Panky, but let's just say I saw a lady burying a tin can in Bo's back yard.
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Post by eric_marsh » Sun Jan 03, 2010 2:46 pm

Tweedy,

What you say is interesting. I guess I tried to do too much with too little. I'll try to remember that in the future.

I was thinking of it as kind of a mini-mystery. At first people are disappearing. Why? Then we follow a single person as he gets disappeared and discover to our horror just how vulnerable everyone is and perhaps that while most of humanity has gone VR there are those who didn't and now prey on those who have.

Yea, perhaps a little much for 100 words. I think that the story has potential though.

Speaking of the Mega-Beasts, how about some critters called the InDuckstrutables next season? They are a flock of ducks that just nibble at your feet but nothing can harm them.
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Re: Gone Missing

Post by ROU Killing Time » Sun Jan 03, 2010 6:31 pm

strawman wrote:I didn't want to bring this up, but Painguin lost by 9 votes. In the first month of balloting, Painguin was running away with the contest, and the balloting on the forum had him leading 6-2-2. At that point the poll "became inoperative". I'm not saying that is proof of Hanky Panky, but let's just say I saw a lady burying a tin can in Bo's back yard.
I have to take the same advice I gave to my Gore-supporting friends in 2000. Gotta just get over it and move on, stop the "President-Select" BS (If it had gone the other way, in a vote that close, then the Bush supporters could have just as easily called Gore the "President-Select.")

I mourn the fall of the noble flightless foul, and now move on into the new year.

One last caveat though. Everything that goes wrong in 2010, and I mean EVERYTHING is gonna get blamed on Hellcat and his infernal supporters.
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Re: Gone Missing

Post by strawman » Sun Jan 03, 2010 7:07 pm

So God, Bush, Obama and congress are off the hook? Boy, I'd call that a Stymie.
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Post by ROU Killing Time » Sun Jan 03, 2010 7:41 pm

strawman wrote:So God, Bush, Obama and congress are off the hook? Boy, I'd call that a Stymie.
Yup, I hope Moonowl is up to the karmic hit. :)
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