Road Trip

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Road Trip

Post by dreamrock » Wed Jan 20, 2010 6:12 am

It had been a once in a lifetime chance. He spotted the craft and knew even with a million things to do, it would be worth the chance.

He waited several hours, not willing to risk a minute for a piss.

The gangly creatures walked on fours, and had mottled blue skin. Their language consisted of chirps and clicks with the occasional hum that covered several octaves simultaneously.

When they were nearly ready to leave, he sneaked aboard.

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Grjerlik found the dead thing. Its immune system hadn't quite survived the common bacteria. It was a shame. They were so cute.
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Re: Road Trip

Post by munsi » Wed Jan 20, 2010 8:08 am

i like it! it's open to a lot of possibilities and interpretations.

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Re: Road Trip

Post by strawman » Wed Jan 20, 2010 2:49 pm

"even if with" and "not willing to risk minute" need to be fixed.
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Re: Road Trip

Post by dreamrock » Thu Feb 18, 2010 4:19 am

strawman wrote:"even if with" and "not willing to risk minute" need to be fixed.
Oh crap. My only excuse for not seeing your feedback until now is that I was on a business trip at the time. :oops: Thanks for pointing out the errors. I fixed 'em.
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Re: Road Trip

Post by Mr. Tweedy » Thu Feb 18, 2010 5:43 am

Hey! You got science in my science fiction!
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Re: Road Trip

Post by dreamrock » Thu Feb 18, 2010 11:48 pm

Mr. Tweedy wrote:Hey! You got science in my science fiction!
Yep yep. :lol:
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