The train

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The train

Post by Phenopath » Thu Feb 04, 2010 8:34 pm

The train rattles across the grey countryside in the sour light of dawn. Inside the carriage ashen faced passengers sit sullen; dressed in suits, ties and thick winter coats. Through the window soggy fields and deserted industrial estates flash by unremarked.

Each shuddering second takes them ever closer to The City.

Some passengers pretend to be occupied by a newspaper or scratching at a laptop. Others simply stare pensively into the middle distance. In truth everybody is listening.

As they approach their destination the voice of The City grows still louder.

"I'm going to eat you. Om nom nom nom."
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Re: The train

Post by Phenopath » Thu Feb 04, 2010 8:36 pm

Today I went to London ;)
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Re: The train

Post by themorg » Thu Feb 04, 2010 8:43 pm

i have to travel on a similar train about 3 times a week (having been on trains to london from brighton/hope on a couple of occasions) i feel eaten every time i enter the city center and almost thrown into another culture/world/or stomach fluid. nice drabble, i am the pensive starer into the middle distance person.
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Re: The train

Post by ROU Killing Time » Thu Feb 04, 2010 9:20 pm

This reminds me of the Iain Banks novel, "The Bridge."
"Never fuck with The Culture"
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Re: The train

Post by Phenopath » Tue Mar 02, 2010 8:46 pm

I have a serendipitous tale to relate.

Last week I again took the commuter train to London. Having heard Steve Eley wittering on about Gormenghast I grabbed a copy of Titus Alone from my bookshelf to replace the horrid paperback in my bag. As I sat among the silent passengers I read the following awesome text at the start of the novel.
Mervyn wrote:Had the old man bent down his head to listen he might have heard a faraway sound, and seen the trembling of Titus's lips for the boy was muttering to himself:

'Wake up, you bloody city... bang your bells!
I'm on my way to eat you!'
What does this tell us?

1) I am an idiot
2) Mervyn Peake is a poet
3) Jungian Synchronicity is my bitch
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Re: The train

Post by ROU Killing Time » Tue Mar 02, 2010 9:58 pm

Phenopath wrote:I have a serendipitous tale to relate.

Last week I again took the commuter train to London. Having heard Steve Eley wittering on about Gormenghast I grabbed a copy of Titus Alone from my bookshelf to replace the horrid paperback in my bag. As I sat among the silent passengers I read the following awesome text at the start of the novel.
Mervyn wrote:Had the old man bent down his head to listen he might have heard a faraway sound, and seen the trembling of Titus's lips for the boy was muttering to himself:

'Wake up, you bloody city... bang your bells!
I'm on my way to eat you!'
What does this tell us?

1) I am an idiot
2) Mervyn Peake is a poet
3) Jungian Synchronicity is my bitch
4) you are Jungian Synchronicities bitch.

Out of my brain on the 5:15
<insert Townsend riff here>
Out of my brain on the train.
"Never fuck with The Culture"
Sublime In Peace Iain M. Banks.

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