In the Moment

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In the Moment

Post by EarlyBird » Tue Feb 09, 2010 2:07 am

My eyes opened on my family's toothy smiles and ridiculous party hats. My breath caught; we so rarely shared smiles any more ...

"Go on!" they cried, "Blow out the candles and make a wish!" I grinned back and took a breath.

Eyes clenched, I blew out the candles thinking, "I wish this moment could last forever!"

My eyes opened on my family's toothy smiles and ridiculous party hats. My breath caught; we so rarely shared smiles any more ...

"Go on!" they cried, "Blow out the candles and make a wish!" I grinned back and took a breath.

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Hello, all! I've been lurking for a bit; decided this was as good a way as any to come out.

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Re: In the Moment

Post by dreamrock » Tue Feb 09, 2010 4:29 am

Oooh, nice and subtle.

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Re: In the Moment

Post by munsi » Tue Feb 09, 2010 6:01 am

i've read this a few times, which it naturally lends itself to, and enjoy it incredibly well. tremendous first post.

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Re: In the Moment

Post by Mr. Tweedy » Tue Feb 09, 2010 6:05 am

A novel apocalypse story.

This is the way the world ends: Not with a bang, but with a wish for.
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Re: In the Moment

Post by munsi » Tue Feb 09, 2010 6:40 am

Mr. Tweedy wrote:A novel apocalypse story.

This is the way the world ends: Not with a bang, but with a wish for.
should i be ashamed by how well i like that pun?

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Re: In the Moment

Post by ROU Killing Time » Tue Feb 09, 2010 7:39 am

Ok, you might have outdone Munsi by writing a first drabble that seems, (in my completely unofficial and non-binding capacity) totally worthy of a drabblecast appearance in your very first posting on the forums.

Most warm welcomes from this humble drabbler and not-so-humble over-poster.

I, for one, hope to see more of your work around here.

A resounding thumbs up on this excellent drabble.

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Re: In the Moment

Post by EarlyBird » Tue Feb 09, 2010 3:05 pm

Thanks for the kind words, all. Looking forward to making your acquaintances ...

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Re: In the Moment

Post by strawman » Tue Feb 09, 2010 3:08 pm

This is the song that never ends, yes it goes on and on my friend. Some people started singing it, not knowing what it was, and they'll continue singing it forever just because...This is the song that never ends, yes it goes on and on my friend. Some people started singing it, not knowing what it was, and they'll continue singing it forever just because...This is the song that never ends, yes it goes on and on my friend. Some people started singing it, not knowing what it was, and they'll continue singing it forever just because...This is the song that never ends, yes it goes on and on my friend. Some people started singing it, not knowing what it was, and they'll continue singing it forever just because...This is the song that never ends, yes it goes on and on my friend. Some people started singing it, not knowing what it was, and they'll continue singing it forever just because...
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Re: In the Moment

Post by EarlyBird » Tue Feb 09, 2010 7:39 pm

This is the song that never ends, yes it goes on and on my friend. Some people started singing it, not knowing what it was, and they'll continue singing it forever just because...
Ahh... you are, of course, referring to the uniquely disharmonious "Happy Birthday to you" trope that cubicle culture across the US forces on us wage slaves. At least once a month, I cringe as my office proves that white folk not only can't dance, they can't sing for shit either.

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Re: In the Moment

Post by strawman » Tue Feb 09, 2010 8:17 pm

Thus, the goal of the public education system and big government: first, to make everyone white, and then to enslave them. The shame of it is, no one will be around to appreciate the sweet irony.
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Re: In the Moment

Post by Scattercat » Tue Feb 09, 2010 9:33 pm

Cute!

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