Doggy

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Doggy

Post by Scattercat » Thu Feb 18, 2010 9:14 pm

Hewlett settled into the ragged armchair. The flickering log in the fireplace concealed more than it illuminated. The house creaked and groaned around him.

Something moved in the dark. Hewlett almost screamed. Shuffling feet and a low panting reassured him. She'd mentioned pets, right? A dog.

A wet tongue lapped at his hand. He scratched absently. Something was... not right. The shape of the head under his fingers was... wrong. He looked down.

Emaciated under lank, greasy hair, the naked man rolled watery eyes up at Hewlett. The man's lips shone wetly as his mouth widened in an idiot grin.

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Re: Doggy

Post by eric_marsh » Sat Feb 20, 2010 1:16 am

Cute imagery.
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Re: Doggy

Post by Scattercat » Sat Feb 20, 2010 1:52 am

That dude scares the crap out of me. He's the face I see hiding behind the shower curtain.

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Re: Doggy

Post by Phenopath » Sat Feb 20, 2010 12:02 pm

I like the concept, and the concluding sentence is spot on/
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Re: Doggy

Post by munsi » Sat Feb 20, 2010 12:35 pm

i dig it, the mood was perfectly established for maximum disturbing payout. put another one up on the big board!

...still no big board? no? ah well....

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