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White

Posted: Mon Sep 13, 2010 8:41 pm
by babydyke
The dwarfs’ dirge sounded like the earthquake singing a lullaby to the apocalypse. Within the crystal coffin, she looked alive—but she’d always been white as the worm that gnawed the mountain’s heart.

“She is beautiful,” the Necromancer Prince moaned, hot breath fogging her image. “Let me raise her and you will have her tonight. But she is mine tomorrow.”

The brothers nodded. “Losing her was pain,” they whispered, “but one more night with her is worth any loss.”

Snow White awoke to the dwarfs leaning over her bed. “Alas,” she wept, “I dreamed an old woman set me free.”

Re: White

Posted: Mon Sep 13, 2010 8:54 pm
by uncre8d1
Nice take on this story!
have you read 'Snow Glass Apples' by Neil Gaiman? I love that version.

Re: White

Posted: Mon Sep 13, 2010 9:02 pm
by babydyke
I have, actually, and I really like it--especially the radio version. So this isn't entirely original. But I had fun writing it.

Re: White

Posted: Tue Sep 14, 2010 3:04 am
by flyawaybefree
I like this one! and where can i find Snow Glass Apples? It sounds really interesting.

Re: White

Posted: Tue Sep 14, 2010 3:09 am
by uncre8d1
Well, the cynic in me says that everything is derivative - but as the Mighty Mur recently pointed out, without derivation there would be no 'Union Dues,' 'True Blood,' or any of a hundred other great storylines.
It's a well-done drabble, a good read, and has plenty of originality. Honestly, the only thing about it that reminded me of Gaiman (a comparison which is high praise in itself) was the general feel of the story - a kind of darker glass laid atop the story that tweaks the imagination and makes me mentally poke around the scene for concealed, half-eaten dwarf limbs...

flyaway: sorry, I'm not sure where to find it; I heard it on SciFi.com's Seeing Ear Theatre back in the days when that channel was cool. There are enough Gaiman fans out there that I'm sure it won't be too hard to track down.

Re: White

Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2010 8:14 pm
by babydyke
You can find "Snow, Glass, Apples," in Gaiman's short story collection, Mask and Mirrors; or the radio production can by found on Itunes if you search for "Neil Gaiman Murder Mysteries" (it's part one of a fantastic two-part series originally released as "Two Plays for Voices" and still up for sale under that title), as part of the Classic Radio Drama podcast. It's also available at http://www.classicradiodrama.com" onclick="window.open(this.href);return false;.