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flyawaybefree
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Post by flyawaybefree » Thu Sep 16, 2010 5:12 am

I enter the pit, unwillingly, the lasers trained on my back to discourage any sudden movements. Avoiding stepping in the grime on the floor of the darkness, I walk to the one bright spot, the pod.

I hesitate, before stepping inside.

It whirs to life, trapping me behind a buzzing blue energy field.

Then, searing knives are in my brain, and I scream and scream until no one can hear me anymore because I am separate, away, above.

I look down and see myself step forward, nodding to my alien captors.

But my- its- eyes are empty.


“I” reenter society.
Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind.
-Dr. Seuss

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Post by manintheshack » Thu Sep 16, 2010 9:14 am

I had to read this a couple of times before I understood what was going on and then it occurred to me: do the aliens realise that their mind control techniques cause each captor's soul to split from their body? Could they inadvertantly be setting themselves up for a full-scale ghostly revolution? That's some delicious revenge right there.
"I kick arse for the Lord."

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Re: Empty

Post by flyawaybefree » Fri Sep 17, 2010 11:30 pm

Thanks for the feedback!
Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind.
-Dr. Seuss

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