He came up behind her, quiet as the wind, amidst the dark shadows from the canopy that cut out almost any light from the already overcast sky.
He was close enough to her that she could hear him when he whispered.
She knew what he was.
“Vampire.”
She knew too much.
“And you know what you are?” He inquired gently, smirking, leaning closer still.
“What?”
“Dead.”
Digging his teeth deep into her neck, he lost himself in the sweet metallic bouquet of her blood.
Draining her dry, he left her there in the forest, letting her be someone else’s problem.
Say It, Out Loud
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Say It, Out Loud
Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind.
-Dr. Seuss
-Dr. Seuss
Re: Say It, Out Loud
Two quibbles do not a drabble unmake...
Both in the last two sentences. First, the missing "in", with what that does to word count. Second, "Drained dry, he..." implies that the wrong character is drained. Perhaps "He emptied her and left her there" would solve both?
Both in the last two sentences. First, the missing "in", with what that does to word count. Second, "Drained dry, he..." implies that the wrong character is drained. Perhaps "He emptied her and left her there" would solve both?
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Known Some Call Is Air Am
"Be kind, for everyone is fighting a hard battle."
Known Some Call Is Air Am
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