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To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Sat Oct 02, 2010 7:35 am
by zcarter80
Though his mental acuity was constantly in question he was no fool.

He knew, or at least could imagine what would happen to him once the authorities found him out.

If not for the vice that drove him here, if only he were smarter like his friends & Neighbors he wouldn’t be terrified, shaking behind the counter of Mr. Hooper’s general store.

His blue fur, Glistened with thick spatters of crimson blood, fragments of bone.

He mumbled as he rocked back and forth.

“All he had to do was give me cookies.”

He sobbed,

“Me truly am a monster.”

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Sat Oct 02, 2010 2:46 pm
by munsi
....my childhood? what have you done to my childhood?

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Sat Oct 02, 2010 4:16 pm
by swamp
Awesome.

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Sat Oct 02, 2010 6:04 pm
by zcarter80
Any reply from munsi requires the Mexican hat dance! Too bad im no good at it since im a black guy.

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Sat Oct 02, 2010 6:05 pm
by zcarter80
thanx swamp, its good to be liked. If anyone wants to record this one have at it (hint hint)!

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Sat Oct 02, 2010 7:05 pm
by swamp
I didn't want to commit yet, but I have some ideas...

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Mon Oct 04, 2010 3:50 am
by zcarter80
kool, i would love to see what has been cooked up in your head.

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Thu Oct 07, 2010 2:29 pm
by flyawaybefree
but he was always my favorite!

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Sat Oct 09, 2010 10:21 pm
by swamp
Listen to the story HERE.

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Mon Oct 11, 2010 10:47 am
by zcarter80
Cool Beans!! Thanks to you and all the other people that make the forums worth while. The people that truly participate and make the experience worth it.

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Tue Oct 12, 2010 8:04 pm
by Phenopath
Cool beans indeed.

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Tue Oct 19, 2010 11:12 pm
by Rish Outfield
One of the greatest drabbles ever to grace us with its presence. The Larry Bird of drabbles.

I would've picked another basketball player, but alas, I'm NOT a black guy. Sigh.

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Mon Nov 08, 2010 4:18 am
by zcarter80
Whoa there Outfield, According to the ladies your black where it counts. All the Drabble love is truly appreciated. hopefully i will write something good enough to make it to the big show. Until then may the many tentacled god of the forums expectorate its visceral fluids upon us all and extrude it's leavings upon our enemies!

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Mon Nov 08, 2010 6:34 pm
by Travelin Corpse Feet
I like the idea, but I think the voice is a bit off. Things like "mental acuity" and "authorities" feel too big to tell a story about the cookie monster.

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 5:36 am
by zcarter80
good point. but i thought it made him seem more like he was playing up his lack of intelligence so people wouldn't expect too much of him. but a valid point none the less.

Re: To Hunger on Certain Streets

Posted: Tue Nov 16, 2010 12:08 am
by Loof
Loved this, both the text and the narration.