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Playtime

Post by rowan_bristol » Mon Jun 13, 2011 2:36 am

“And he can punch through steel, and he can fly and he protects the city!” The boy sat with his dad in the main room of their tiny apartment. He held his brand new Captain Awesome figurine like a cherished treasure.

His father smiled, watching him play. “So what’s his secret identity?”

“No one knows. I bet he’s some kind of super-scientist or billionaire!”

“You know what I think? I think he’s just some hard-working guy who tries to juggle taking care of a kid on his own with his pledge for justice.”

“That’s silly, daddy.”

His father smiled indulgently.
"To Love is to Act."

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Re: Playtime

Post by Scattercat » Mon Jun 13, 2011 3:15 am

Ha!

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Re: Playtime

Post by strawman » Mon Jun 13, 2011 1:51 pm

Good one. And well-crafted.
But when the kid turns into a self-absorbed, snot-mouthed teen, let's see what happens to that restraint.

Perhaps a follow-up?
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Re: Playtime

Post by HR_Duff_n_Stuff » Wed Jun 15, 2011 11:47 pm

Seeing that there is now the requested followup, I guess that
'To Love is to Act' now becomes ..'To Love is to Act I '

I like this -just that right level of momentary processing to pull in the Aha!

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Re: Playtime

Post by ROU Killing Time » Thu Jun 16, 2011 3:05 am

Great concept,
Great execution,
Great drabble.
Castworthy even, imo.

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