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You are the Contoller

Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2011 3:12 pm
by CLP
“Son, I have a new videogame I want you to try.” Said Frank

“Huh? Oh, let me get to a save point.” Said Jimmy.

Frank led Jimmy out the front door. “Look.”

Jimmy rubbed his bloodshot eyes. “Turn down the brightness.”

“You’ll get used to it.”

“Where’s the controller?”

“You don’t need one. You are the controller.”

“Wow! The graphics are amazing! The physics engine is almost natural.” Jimmy stepped out in the grass. “It even feels real.”

Frank Smiled.

What’s the goal of this game?” Jimmy asked. “Who are the enemies?”

Frank handed him a rifle, “They all are.”

Re: You are the Contoller

Posted: Thu Jul 21, 2011 2:31 pm
by noctem93
As I was reading, I kept thinking "oh, how clever". I thought this was just going to be a morality play on unplugging and the sad state of the modern video game junkie. It wasn't until the last line, which I completely failed to see coming, that my "oh, how clever" turned into an "oh you cheeky bastard!"

What a dark and satisfyingly unexpected ending.

Great dialog. Great pacing. Great idea. Great twist.

Re: You are the Contoller

Posted: Thu Jul 21, 2011 3:12 pm
by ROU Killing Time
Creepy. Great twist. Get your med checked. ;-)

Re: You are the Contoller

Posted: Thu Jul 21, 2011 4:08 pm
by CLP
It was originally just going to be a dad trying to get his son to play out side, but i thought it needed more umph.

meds refilled! i knew i was forgetting something! i went to the pharmacy and could not for the life of me remember why i was there.

Re: You are the Contoller

Posted: Thu Jul 21, 2011 6:26 pm
by strawman
Dodging bullets can be distracting.