(Soft Apocalypse Theme) Where Were You? by Brian B.

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(Soft Apocalypse Theme) Where Were You? by Brian B.

Post by LMG Writers' Club » Wed Apr 17, 2013 6:11 pm

Where were you when the world stopped turning? Oh, I’m not talking about that lame song about something that happened eons ago. I’m talking about the Earth literally ceasing to turn, leading half of us to freeze and the other to burn. Where were you when the oceans stopped producing waves? Or when the tectonic plates stopped shifting to create the first time the Earth’s underground has ever been at peace? When someone tried to go faster than light, trying to defy Einstein’s laws? Where were you when that idiotic Superman fellow decided to try to go back in time?
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Re: (Soft Apocalypse Theme) Where Were You? by Brian B.

Post by strawman » Wed Apr 17, 2013 11:22 pm

Sorry. Only 100 words.
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Re: (Soft Apocalypse Theme) Where Were You? by Brian B.

Post by LMG Writers' Club » Thu Apr 18, 2013 12:17 am

strawman wrote:Sorry. Only 100 words.
If you're referring to my Drabble not containing exactly 100 words, I can assure you that it does. You may have made a counting error. If not, please specify your concern.

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Re: (Soft Apocalypse Theme) Where Were You? by Brian B.

Post by strawman » Thu Apr 18, 2013 12:36 am

I find dialogue much more interesting than monologue, and thought (correctly) that you might respond if I challenged your word count. I knew you had exactly 100 words, but notice that I was not actually challenging your word count, but saying you "only had 100 words". So it qualifies to be called a drabble.

However, that is not the only qualification to make a drabble, and that is why I need to be sure that there are actual writers who read the forum, since I'm investing my time and interest in trying to provoke you to want to improve.

If it is enough to ask "Where were you..." in various apocalyptic scenarios, and then shave a word here and add a word there to come to 100, then it is my opinion that your time would be better spent starting the LMG Sudoku Club.

As it is, I wonder why ya'll never rewrite or discuss or defend, which writers constantly seem to be doing. I want to encourage you to engage, but I wonder if your hearts are in it. I wonder if you listen to the stories on the podcast, and if you have other identities with which you post on the other forums and participate in the community. It is a very safe playground here, except for Dr. Banzai, and that's just when the moon is full.

"Sorry. Only 100 words" means 100 words is exactly not enough.
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Re: (Soft Apocalypse Theme) Where Were You? by Brian B.

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Thu Apr 18, 2013 4:52 am

strawman is right on several counts. You should defend this... and you should also revise it.

The thing to remember is that you're writing a 100-word story. It is challenging to write a story effectively in 100 words, and a 100-word piece will have a strong tendency to become a prose-poem instead of a story. I think that's what happened here.

Start with a plot, then figure out what part of it you want to tell and how to fit it into 100 words. Repetition is not a technique that really belongs in drabbles. You should be fighting to fit your story into 100 words, not adding filler. If your idea is too small to fill 100 words, it's the wrong idea.

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