Blown Cover (Relocation)

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Bejami
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Blown Cover (Relocation)

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“Come on, Frank,” the vampire pleaded. “I know I messed up, but Nebraska!”

“I don't know what to tell you, Tibs,” responded his Paranormal Integrations officer. “I'm running out of placements. Next time it's Nevada. And not Vegas, out in the desert. No neighbors.”

“Alright,” Tiberius relented. “I'll take it. But you know I didn't mean to. The farmer's market was a mistake, but you know beet juice is my safety food. How could I have known I would have to pass three different stalls selling blood sausage. When that lady got a bloody nose I just...”



I twabbled this idea last week and couldn't quite let it go.
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I like the explanation of what happened at the farmer's market... "comic mischief ensues." But the dialogue before that doesn't quite work for me, at least not in a drabble. I think it would be a perfectly fine scene in a longer short story, though.

I would like to hear more about Tiberius's previous comical transgressions.
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Thanks, gunsofchekhovia. I wasn't sure I could get across everything I had in my head. I'll have to expand it when I get the time.
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Vampire Vaudeville... a new genre is born.
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