Fiction? (Journal --ish)

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Fiction? (Journal --ish)

Post by phyx » Fri Sep 13, 2013 4:30 pm

I’m not a writer and I don’t belong here.

A friend of mine insisted that I register … and read … and write.

“Friend.” It's not the appropriate title and she knows it as well as I. It's not where we should be.

One more picture. I need to fill in that last little spot on my wall to complete the mural, but she doesn’t send me pictures of herself anymore and this camera is of horrible quality. I want to get closer, but she’ll surely see me. Watching is enough; and I’m comfortable enough. I have my laptop, camera, and patience.
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Re: Fiction? (Jounal... of a sorts)

Post by strawman » Fri Sep 13, 2013 7:41 pm

Tricky little intro there; I don't recall any previous submissions where the author kind of backs into the forum. That little gimmick almost distracted us from mentioning the title misspellerization and only 99 words. Plus half a deduction for the phrase "of a sorts". Still, that's a 97.5 = A+ :P

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Re: Fiction? (Journal... of a sorts)

Post by phyx » Fri Sep 13, 2013 7:56 pm

strawman wrote:Tricky little intro there; I don't recall any previous submissions where the author kind of backs into the forum. That little gimmick almost distracted us from mentioning the title misspellerization and only 99 words. Plus half a deduction for the phrase "of a sorts". Still, that's a 97.5 = A+ :P
Misspelling? I have no idea what you're talking about. Also, I totally didn't go fix that. It was never misspelled.

Also, My Word counts 101, not 99. Either way, it's a fail. I count 99 manually. Meh... fixed.
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Re: Fiction? (Journal... of a sorts)

Post by strawman » Fri Sep 13, 2013 8:01 pm

And "of a sorts"?
A nolo contendere plea, even though you looted the evidence room?
Crimminy, man! You have much to learn.
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Re: Fiction? (Journal --ish)

Post by phyx » Fri Sep 13, 2013 8:09 pm

Is it that bad?
I figured that the absolutely poor choice of verbiage was necessary when starting a quasi-exposition with "I'm not a writer and I don't belong here."

But... removed.

Thanks for the input.

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Re: Fiction? (Journal --ish)

Post by strawman » Fri Sep 13, 2013 8:54 pm

My quibble was with the singularity of "a" modifying the plurality of "sorts". "of many sorts" would be fine, or "of a sort". But "of a sorts" clogs the pool filter.
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Re: Fiction? (Journal --ish)

Post by Flintknapper » Fri Sep 13, 2013 9:01 pm

I liked the intro. Welcome to the boards phyx.

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Re: Fiction? (Journal --ish)

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Fri Sep 13, 2013 10:46 pm

strawman wrote:My quibble was with the singularity of "a" modifying the plurality of "sorts". "of many sorts" would be fine, or "of a sort". But "of a sorts" clogs the pool filter.
It's a hokeyism that I think would work well in a different context, but it doesn't fit with the tone of the rest of the piece.

Other than that, nice metadrabble, phyx. Welcome.

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Re: Fiction? (Journal --ish)

Post by Varda » Fri Sep 13, 2013 10:50 pm

Ah, the proud tradition of metadrabbling! A ballsy, funny introduction. Welcome, welcome!
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