All These Worlds Are Yours

100 word stories. Post all you like, maybe we'll dip in and use yours?
Post Reply
User avatar
Cwpants
Member
Posts: 84
Joined: Tue Sep 10, 2013 11:54 pm
Location: Wisconsin

All These Worlds Are Yours

Post by Cwpants » Mon Sep 23, 2013 10:22 pm

“Jameson… your orders?”

I’d heard Private White over my helmet comm the first time. I didn’t know what to say, but our entire squad had been slaughtered and as Private First Class I outranked him – slightly.

“We have one hour to get to the drop point. We don’t get back, we don’t go home.”

“And... what about the others?”

“What others? There’s nothing left.” Not even dog tags. Those damned Tendrilheads… We knew the risks when we signed up for the mission. It’s just us now.

20 miles in one E-hour… on foot… across the icy hell of Europa. Hooah.

Note: after speaking with my sister, who is in the army, I changed a few pieces of dialogue for realism.
C.W. Pants

“The road to hell is paved with adverbs.”
― Stephen King, On Writing

User avatar
strawman
Member
Posts: 5966
Joined: Sat Oct 20, 2007 2:20 pm
Location: South Georgia

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

Post by strawman » Tue Sep 24, 2013 12:42 am

Artemis II
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

"Be kind, for everyone is fighting a hard battle."
Known Some Call Is Air Am
Spoiler:
Non sum qualis eram = "I am not who I will be"

User avatar
Cwpants
Member
Posts: 84
Joined: Tue Sep 10, 2013 11:54 pm
Location: Wisconsin

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

Post by Cwpants » Tue Sep 24, 2013 1:42 am

strawman wrote:Artemis II
You talkin' the Artemis Project? :)
C.W. Pants

“The road to hell is paved with adverbs.”
― Stephen King, On Writing

User avatar
strawman
Member
Posts: 5966
Joined: Sat Oct 20, 2007 2:20 pm
Location: South Georgia

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

Post by strawman » Tue Sep 24, 2013 3:17 am

Yes. Thinking this drabble might have that as a backstory.
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

"Be kind, for everyone is fighting a hard battle."
Known Some Call Is Air Am
Spoiler:
Non sum qualis eram = "I am not who I will be"

User avatar
Cwpants
Member
Posts: 84
Joined: Tue Sep 10, 2013 11:54 pm
Location: Wisconsin

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

Post by Cwpants » Tue Sep 24, 2013 3:30 am

strawman wrote:Yes. Thinking this drabble might have that as a backstory.
When I wrote this, my mind was actually in the realm of 2010: Odyssey Two by Arthur C. Clarke.
C.W. Pants

“The road to hell is paved with adverbs.”
― Stephen King, On Writing

User avatar
Varda
Connor Choadsworth Defender
Posts: 1383
Joined: Wed Apr 10, 2013 5:41 pm
Location: Athens, Georgia
Contact:

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

Post by Varda » Tue Sep 24, 2013 11:52 pm

Fistbump for correct spelling and very woeful usage of "Hooah"! :D
Medical Microfiction: Stories about Science

Drabblescout Badges:
Merits: Twabble Author (5), Drabble Author (4), DRIP Slave Volunteer (2), Whittling (1), Macaroni Crafts (2)
Demerits: Redd*t Rouser (2), Whittler's Mother (6)

User avatar
Cwpants
Member
Posts: 84
Joined: Tue Sep 10, 2013 11:54 pm
Location: Wisconsin

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

Post by Cwpants » Fri Oct 11, 2013 2:54 pm

Ha! Just saw this! Thank you, Varda!!
C.W. Pants

“The road to hell is paved with adverbs.”
― Stephen King, On Writing

User avatar
zcarter80
Member
Posts: 298
Joined: Thu Jul 15, 2010 6:12 am
Location: Chicago IL
Contact:

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

Post by zcarter80 » Wed Oct 16, 2013 8:51 am

It looks like somebody has a knack for hundred word stories. I'm glad to read your lines they sing in a key most pleasing.
If I wrote it you can read it unless you sound like Fran Drescher.

User avatar
Flintknapper
Member
Posts: 240
Joined: Thu May 09, 2013 9:06 pm
Location: Jemez Springs, New Mexico

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

Post by Flintknapper » Wed Oct 16, 2013 10:49 pm

I didnt get the reference until reading the comments. Loved the word choice on this one. it read like the army. In fact, i could almost imagine snake doc from the unit reading this one. I do not know what the actor's name is but he does the allstate commercials now days.

User avatar
Cwpants
Member
Posts: 84
Joined: Tue Sep 10, 2013 11:54 pm
Location: Wisconsin

Re: All These Worlds Are Yours

Post by Cwpants » Thu Oct 17, 2013 4:02 pm

Flintknapper wrote:I didnt get the reference until reading the comments. Loved the word choice on this one. it read like the army. In fact, i could almost imagine snake doc from the unit reading this one. I do not know what the actor's name is but he does the allstate commercials now days.
Yes!! I got goodebumps at imagining Jonas Blane reading this!

And thanks, ZCarter, for the kind words! :)

I'd love to explore this story in a longer piece, but soldiers are SO far out of my comfort zone, I think it wouldn't end well. Haha.
C.W. Pants

“The road to hell is paved with adverbs.”
― Stephen King, On Writing

Post Reply