At the Border

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At the Border

Post by Scattercat » Wed Oct 09, 2013 8:50 am

The line is Ouroboros in shabby coats.

Ahead, the guard beckons the frontmost applicant forward. His coat is an incongruously cheery blue. He stares at the applicant, a stolid woman in late middle age.

“Have you ever loved a man to exhaustion out of hatred?” the guard asks.

The woman stammers.

The guard gestures with his rifle. “Denied. Next!”

A young man, fresh-faced and stubbly.

“What is the day and hour that you will die?”

The youth is bold. “Not today.”

The guard sneers. “Denied.”

The line snakes on, out the door and beyond. The sun has not yet risen.

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Re: At the Border

Post by strawman » Wed Oct 09, 2013 9:02 am

At last, they got the glitches out of the health exchanges.
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Re: At the Border

Post by Varda » Wed Oct 09, 2013 11:11 am

Scattercat wrote:The line is Ouroboros in shabby coats.

The line snakes on, out the door and beyond.
:lol: I see what you did there!
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Re: At the Border

Post by Flintknapper » Wed Oct 09, 2013 3:38 pm

I like the fact that the line is Ouroboros, the snake that consumes itself. It is a hardcore reference. Someone has been doing their homework. It reads as purgatory as opposed to hell. Though technically I think the concept predates christainity so it probably neither.

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Re: At the Border

Post by will write for beer » Fri Oct 18, 2013 1:16 am

Scattercat wrote:The line is Ouroboros in shabby coats.
LOVE this line.
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