It's a Trap!

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It's a Trap!

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Thu Oct 10, 2013 5:33 pm

I can see so much from this corner of the room. The hideous curtains block out the sunlight, but I can still see in the light of the television screen.

There is a pile of Cheetos on the floor. The sofa is soaked in beer. There is a man sitting in that marsh of stinky beer and musty foam, his face contorted in a grimace of excruciating pain, two tiny holes in the back of his neck. The phone lies, beeping impotently, ten feet away.

Now I just have to wait for the tasty, crunchy little winged things to arrive.

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Post by strawman » Thu Oct 10, 2013 5:39 pm

All my rowdy friends are here on Monday night
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Post by Flintknapper » Thu Oct 10, 2013 6:12 pm

lol. I would say they had better be there in 30 minutes or they are free, but I got feeling he isn't planning on paying anyways.

The only issue I had with the drabble is the title which reminded me the calamari guy in return of the jedi.

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Post by Varda » Thu Oct 10, 2013 7:11 pm

Oh man, is the narrator cultivating a maggot/fly farm?! That is disgusting. And kinda hilarious. Okay, really hilarious in a sick sort of way! :lol:
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Re: It's a Trap!

Post by gunsofchekhovia » Thu Oct 10, 2013 7:19 pm

Oh man, is the narrator cultivating a maggot/fly farm?!
It is. It is also supposed to be a spider, so that might make it less disgusting. Probably not, though.

Flintknapper, No, I would say he is not planning on paying for them.

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