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Windows of the Soul?

Posted: Sat Sep 27, 2014 7:41 pm
by unreliable narrator
Cecilia despised her synthetic eyes. She sat by the mirror each evening gazing at her reflection, her china face perfectly painted, and dark curls falling in neat ringlets. Over time the plan had come to her, and tonight she would act.

The cat spat and paced inside its crate as she approached, tail twitching. She raised one side swiftly, grasping the screaming beast, tearing porcelain fingers into its flesh, popping one eye then the other from its socket with triumphant precision.

This evening she sits by the mirror, green irises luminescent in the twilight. Content, yet still unable to smile.

Re: Windows of the Soul?

Posted: Sun Sep 28, 2014 11:28 am
by Horrorshow
Splendidly macabre. This is right up my alley. Very well written, unreliable narrator.

Re: Windows of the Soul?

Posted: Sun Sep 28, 2014 4:03 pm
by unreliable narrator
Thanks Horrorshow! I really struggle with the 100 word format because it's so restricting... somethings got to go, be it characterisation, background, setting or whatever, but really glad you liked it! As a result of my struggling I thought it might be fun to do a sequel drabble story to give another perspective. Is that cheating? Anyway, here goes...

Perspective

Looking down from her grimy attic window Cecilia could survey the large expanse of manicured lawn and over the trees beyond. She could hear the cries of the woodland creatures therein, the wavering note of an owl and the occasional infant-like scream of a fox in the valley. When she closed her eyes she could imagine the sickly scent of sap and the gentle crunch of pine needles beneath her feet.

She turned sadly from the pane, jade eyes flashing the brief reflection of her single candle flame as it sputtered out. She was left in darkness, cold and alone.

Re: Windows of the Soul?

Posted: Sun Sep 28, 2014 11:42 pm
by PB&Jellyphish320
Ooohhh this is Terribly nice! Attention getting title, and and marvelously cold character. Good job!

Re: Windows of the Soul?

Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2014 8:15 am
by unseentangerine
+1

Re: Windows of the Soul?

Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2014 6:20 pm
by MonsieurMoustache
Ghoulish.
Cat-eyed dolls. That'll give even Bloody Mary a run for her scary money.

Re: Windows of the Soul?

Posted: Tue Sep 30, 2014 1:45 pm
by unreliable narrator
I'll take Ghoulish! Thanks :lol:

Re: Windows of the Soul?

Posted: Fri Oct 10, 2014 2:23 pm
by Lucy Jayne
This one caught my attention, I love it. Made me squirm at the end :D

Re: Windows of the Soul?

Posted: Fri Oct 10, 2014 2:47 pm
by strawman
Lucy Jayne wrote:This one caught my attention, I love it. Made me squirm at the end :D
Careful, Lucy Jayne. The Worm Within has the same effect.