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Chivalrybean
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Faces

Post by Chivalrybean » Sat Aug 01, 2009 9:54 pm

Sad Betty crawled down the shelf. She walked across the aisle and stole a knife from a commando. He never paid any attention to her. She slunk back to her spot on the shelf. Beside her was Smiling Sarah. She giggled as the commando waved to her. When no one was looking, Betty pulled Sarah into the shadows.

"OK honey, you wanted a Sarah doll?"

"No mommy, I want that one!"

She pointed to a doll with a face that was slightly crooked. The doll was smiling. Behind, where no one could see, a doll with no face silently cried.

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Post by ROU Killing Time » Sun Aug 02, 2009 5:56 am

Are you on the 2003 Steroid list?

No one can knock them out of the ball park this consistently without performance enhancers.

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Post by Chivalrybean » Sun Aug 02, 2009 6:03 am

See, I only posted some good ones, not the other 60 crappy ones.

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Post by ROU Killing Time » Fri Aug 07, 2009 2:03 am

Chivalrybean wrote:See, I only posted some good ones, not the other 60 crappy ones.
Alrighty then, but when your on your game, your really on your game.

That's one of the best closing lines for a drabble I've ever read.

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Post by Chivalrybean » Fri Aug 07, 2009 3:21 am

ROU Killing Time wrote:
Chivalrybean wrote:See, I only posted some good ones, not the other 60 crappy ones.
Alrighty then, but when your on your game, your really on your game.

That's one of the best closing lines for a drabble I've ever read.
Thanks! I thought it was pretty ominous and creepy.

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