Falling Into Night

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Falling Into Night

Post by ROU Killing Time » Sun Aug 23, 2009 10:45 am

Seconds before Captain Ophelia Danner reported her situation the emergency claxons had been automatically triggered.

Gravitational flares from Sagittarius A* had violently yanked the ship, tearing it from the embrace of the tractor fields meant to prevent a fall into the malevolent face below.

The communications officer aboard Mining Station Orpheus grimly took what would be the final message from Excavator Tug Eurydice.

His breath froze in his chest.

Trembling silently, he watched the ship rapidly recede.

She winked out of time and space, across the event horizon, and into a night that was darker than any had ever known.
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Post by Phenopath » Sun Aug 23, 2009 11:48 am

Very good. It has a clear narrative, and although it does not have the obligatory twist it has an educational moral for younger readers; 'take care when deep space mining close to a black hole'.

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Post by ROU Killing Time » Sun Aug 23, 2009 10:47 pm

Phenopath wrote:Very good. It has a clear narrative, and although it does not have the obligatory twist it has an educational moral for younger readers; 'take care when deep space mining close to a black hole'.
That, as well as the necessity of actually researching mythology if you give your vessels Greek names.
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