He Had A Farm

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He Had A Farm

Post by Hellcat » Mon Nov 05, 2018 6:25 pm

When the first wave of raw magic hit the land, the first thing it did was give animals a human voice. This proved problematic to farmers who sold dairy and meat. Made it real awkward too. Many simply quit, or grew only veggies and such. And then there was MacDonald.

They say he had a farm, once upon a time. The constant animal chit-chat drew him to madness though. He thought he could he teach the animals what they were suppose to say, with an ax and pitchfork. Eventually, the cows did say 'moo', and the sheep said 'baa'.
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Re: He Had A Farm

Post by Weird Beard » Wed Nov 14, 2018 11:53 am

I like this story, and I appreciate the difficulty in getting a story to fit exactly 100 words having tried a few myself.

The only part that didn't quite work for me was "He thought he could teach the animals what they were supposed to say". The word 'thought', for me, doesn't fit when he succeeded in the end. Perhaps instead of 'thought' the word 'knew' would have fit better?

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Re: He Had A Farm

Post by Hellcat » Wed Nov 14, 2018 1:14 pm

Thanks for the suggestion, but for me using the word 'thought' sounds ambiguous. Like he didn't know if he could get into their heads how they were suppose to act / talk. He had to go through a lot of messy trial and error. Also, using 'knew' gives undertones that the guy is a bigot, like everyone and everything has to BE a certain way, and if you don't bend to his will.. oh boy.

With 'thought' it sounds like he tried to adapt, but couldn't cope with the change. How can you truly know things when you've sunken into madness? That's just my lil narrative of him in my head though. He could be a bigot, maybe he is, hehe.
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Re: He Had A Farm

Post by Weird Beard » Wed Nov 14, 2018 7:24 pm

Fair enough :)

I like how you've imagined the story with this explanation, its a shame it wouldn't fit into the 100 words, but then I guess that is the challenge of only having 100 words.

I look forward to your next submission.
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