The Writer's Prayer

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The Writer's Prayer

Post by ROU Killing Time » Fri Aug 28, 2009 8:20 pm

The writer knelt and prayed in humble supplication.

“O gracious heavenly muse, come unto me this night.”

“Fertilize the fallow fields of my imagination with thy fragrant anointments.”

He slept and dreamt of thundering hooves running wild around him, of great winged elk descending around his abode in a raucous stampede.

The next morning he stood by his wife and surveyed the wreckage that had been their front yard, both overcome by the odor of ordure emanating from the giant piles of cow manure.

His wife glared at him and said, “I told you that’s not how you pronounce ‘Muse.’”
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Re: The Writer's Prayer

Post by ROU Killing Time » Fri Aug 28, 2009 8:46 pm

I was trying to save you some keystrokes with the Polling Options, Tweedy. :)
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Re: The Writer's Prayer

Post by Mr. Tweedy » Fri Aug 28, 2009 8:51 pm

I voted for both. (Nice feature, that!)

I liked it that you never actually wrote out "Moose." Because the pun is implied, it takes a second to get it, leading to an "aha" moment about 2 seconds after the last word is read. Very nice.
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Re: The Writer's Prayer

Post by ROU Killing Time » Fri Aug 28, 2009 8:55 pm

Yes, but sadly it would'nt translate to audio. I dunno, maybe if someone were REALLLY good, they could pass it off as a one-time slip in production values and still save the punchline for the end. Mostly I see it as written word-play gag, though.

Oh, also, I was thinking "moo's " as in heavenly cows, but I think moose might be a bit better.

I'll need to tweak the lines about cattle and cows and compare them to see which one has more impact.

Changed Cattle to Elk, (They call Moose Elk in Europe) and left the rest the same. Female moose being cows and all.

Thanks for helping make it perfect(ly awful) Tweedy. :)
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Re: The Writer's Prayer

Post by revsleestaxx » Fri Aug 28, 2009 9:33 pm

meeses killed my family. i liked the play on words and it inspired a prompt or two for me to work on.
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Re: The Writer's Prayer

Post by ROU Killing Time » Fri Aug 28, 2009 9:41 pm

revsleestaxx wrote:meeses killed my family. i liked the play on words and it inspired a prompt or two for me to work on.
Looking forward to some more of your guerrilla-stylings...
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Re: The Writer's Prayer

Post by tbaker2500 » Sun Sep 20, 2009 5:40 am

Add another option: Rim shot.
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