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Dreamsicle

Post by dreamrock » Mon Nov 30, 2009 5:59 am

The dreamsicle was marketing fluff. "Tastes like real dreams!" couldn't be true. Then, I had a lick. At first it tasted like nothing. Not cold, hard, or sweet.

Slowly, there was a sensation on my tongue. I realized that I had not felt my tongue at all when I first licked. The feeling then was like having thirty tongues, but none of them solid.

I had a sudden desire to wash my hands, but my tongue kept telling my brain it tasted soap. Every thought produced its own taste.

I'm not sure which whimsy produced the coppery taste of blood.

Edited 12/06/2009 4:10 PM EST
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Re: Dreamsicle

Post by ROU Killing Time » Mon Nov 30, 2009 6:25 am

That's what happens when you by your ice cream on Shakedown Street.

Nice drabble. (Someone wasn't trying to drag you to one of those "Twilight" movies at the end of it, were they?)
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Re: Dreamsicle

Post by dreamrock » Mon Nov 30, 2009 6:58 am

Thanks!

The first Twilight movie was such a great comedy, I went to see New Moon with great hopes of a laugh riot. Unfortunately, someone tried to make it a good movie, and it utterly failed to provide the hoped-for laughs. I kept wishing for a Sarah Michelle Geller cameo.

The significance of the blood in the drabble is more mundane than that, though. It's a tease for the darker side of dreams. There were other possibilities, but other tastes associated with nightmares had more baggage than I wanted. Mm, brains.
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Re: Dreamsicle

Post by juliasd » Thu Dec 03, 2009 4:24 am

I know you wrote this a while ago, Dreamrock, but I just read it. I love the dark twist at the end. Makes me think of how dreams can slowly deteriorate into something not so dreamy. Something that makes you wake up too scared to turn on the light switch. Nice going!

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Re: Dreamsicle

Post by strawman » Thu Dec 03, 2009 1:36 pm

dreamrock wrote: Every thought or plan made more tastes.

I'm not sure which inspired the coppery taste of blood.
Hmmmm. Tasty. But the end sounds awkward to my ear. How 'bout

"Every intention produced its own taste.
I'm not sure what thought produced the coppery taste of blood."

Gack! Must get taste of Grimsley out of my mouth!
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Re: Dreamsicle

Post by dreamrock » Fri Dec 04, 2009 3:32 am

Intention is a bit too active. Having "thought" in both lines would be too much. Perhaps:

"Every thought produced its own taste.
I'm not sure which whimsy produced the coppery taste of blood."
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Re: Dreamsicle

Post by eric_marsh » Sat Dec 05, 2009 2:00 pm

I think that would work a little better.
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