Leaving a Mark

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ROU Killing Time
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Leaving a Mark

Post by ROU Killing Time » Thu Dec 03, 2009 5:27 am

Countless quantum decisions flowed through diverging universes in the cosmic expanse.

Patterns formed and emerged; intelligences arose, history and memory began.

Systems to monitor, store, and analyze the universal information flow came into being.

For lack of anything better to do, they set to task; cataloging, sifting, recording all of existence.

When their work was done, they sent the results to a focal point of contemplation.

It considered the stories of all the possible universes, and awoke.

Opening his eyes, the boy looked down and picked up a stone, then slowly and methodically carved his initials in the sandstone wall.
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Re: Leaving a Mark

Post by dreamrock » Thu Dec 03, 2009 5:48 am

Ye elder gods, I love the way you slowly build up the significance only to bring it down to what we would normally consider mundane. Reminds me of Discordianism in a way.
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Re: Leaving a Mark

Post by juliasd » Thu Dec 03, 2009 6:28 am

Not only is Leaving a Mark extremely deep, it's very poetic and visual. I've read it a few times now and each time I feel like I can see the whole thing taking place in front of me. Really lovely imagery.

Kudos to you, RU!

PS: Also, it kind of reminds me of the whole idea behind Hitchhiker's Guide. This was what the computer created to find the question that "42" answers was trying to accomplish.

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Re: Leaving a Mark

Post by ROU Killing Time » Thu Dec 03, 2009 6:42 am

Thanks dream and julia. I was thinking about the simple wonder that came as a child, simply playing by a dirt wall, and what the driving forces behind the wonder of such experiences are.
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Re: Leaving a Mark

Post by strawman » Thu Dec 03, 2009 1:51 pm

Poetic? Visual? Someone forgot to put their glasses on. You have overlooked the pointless and arbitrary creation and annihilation of tens of trillions of sentient beings in these created universes, who lived and loved and dreamed by sandstone walls. Imagine their "sense of wonder" when your clueless little boy opens his eyes, ending their existence in a flash of light.

Harsh, ROU. Harsh.
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Re: Leaving a Mark

Post by tbaker2500 » Thu Dec 03, 2009 10:23 pm

LOL!! That was pretty good, strawman.

As I posted on your blog ROU, it took me a couple of reads to understand the collapsing of the universe form the cosmic scale to the kid scale. But it's good, and leaves a mark.
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