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Kidnapped by Aliens

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A grasshopper blundered through my open car's window.
To the toy spider on the back seat, it said:
Take me to your leader!

Hello All,
long time listener, first time poster, hope you like.
It's called "Kidnapped by Aliens", but that didn't fit the 100-character limit... and is not really needed.
First posted on my FB page, https://www.facebook.com/kafri/posts/10151901582104879
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Re: Kidnapped by Aliens

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David Kafri wrote:A grasshopper blundered through my open car's window.
To the toy spider on the back seat, it said:
Take me to your leader!
This should be car's open window -- although blundering through a closed window can be more fun.

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Re: Post your Twitfic Twabbles Here! (General Content)

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Hello David! Welcome to the forums. Put your feet up and stay awhile!
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Re: Kidnapped by Aliens

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Algernon Sydney is Dead wrote:
David Kafri wrote:A grasshopper blundered through my open car's window.
To the toy spider on the back seat, it said:
Take me to your leader!
This should be car's open window -- although blundering through a closed window can be more fun.

Welcome aboard, David Kafri!
Thanks!
That is exactly the kind of stuff that's hard to get right 'cause English is not my first language (Hebrew is). It didn't feel quite right, but I couldn't put my finger on what was wrong... (another) good reason to post here :-)
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Re: Post your Twitfic Twabbles Here! (General Content)

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tbaker2500 wrote:Hello David! Welcome to the forums. Put your feet up and stay awhile!

:) if my feet were any "upper", I'd be standing on my head... :)
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Sheep ire.

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In eerily silence he crept through the dark. A sheep reared up, fangs gleaming. "It's happening," he thought at the end.
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lyda wrote:In eerily silence he crept through the dark. A sheep reared up, fangs gleaming. "It's happening," he thought at the end.
You can turn a verb into a noun by gerundification. But I don't believe allowance has yet been made for adverbs to be adjectified, unless you have a valid poetic license.

I have driven around Ireland, and let me just say I know the feeling.
I thought it was really quaint how they use sheep for their graffiti.
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Re: Sheep ire.

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strawman wrote:
lyda wrote:In eerily silence he crept through the dark. A sheep reared up, fangs gleaming. "It's happening," he thought at the end.
You can turn a verb into a noun by gerundification. But I don't believe allowance has yet been made for adverbs to be adjectified, unless you have a valid poetic license.

I have driven around Ireland, and let me just say I know the feeling.
I thought it was really quaint how they use sheep for their graffiti.
Oh drat. I had originally started with "The night was eerily..." but "the dark" was less characters and conveyed the same. But I think this makes it better - I wanted "started" because, obviously, it better implies something new, different and munchier is happening.

There are sheep in the field next to me at the moment. They look placid and harmless, but you just know if they had a way they would wreck mighty revenge.

So. Twabble mark II.

In eerie silence he crept through the dark. A sheep reared up, fangs gleaming. "It has started!" were his last thoughts.
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Still have a quibble. "It has started" is only one thought, no?
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strawman wrote:Still have a quibble. "It has started" is only one thought, no?
You have a quibble with a twabble? That's trouble!
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tbaker2500 wrote:
strawman wrote:Still have a quibble. "It has started" is only one thought, no?
You have a quibble with a twabble? That's trouble!
More properly referred to as a "quabble."
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Not twubble?
Bo, can we just ad an Elmer Fudd emoticon for this?
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tactical error

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"Maybe I didn't think this one through," he mouthed, looking up at his body from between the feet of his worthy opponent.
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Bejami wrote:"Maybe I didn't think this one through," he mouthed, looking up at his body from between the feet of his worthy opponent.
IF
If you can keep your feet when all around you, you lie broken,
you'll be a ghoul, my son.
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"Geomancy. G-E-O-M-A-N-C-Y."

In the crowd, proud wizards cheered for their apprentices. The Spelling Bee had begun.
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Probably works better if you use "Spell-ing Bee".

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Varda wrote:"Geomancy. G-E-O-M-A-N-C-Y."

In the crowd, proud wizards cheered for their apprentices. The Spelling Bee had begun.
Awesome. :D
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Thanks, Tom! :D
Algernon Sydney is Dead wrote: Snow White slept for a spell
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He was a foiled necrophiliac
vs morning breath, quite tragic.
We thought the apocalypse was averted, until the zombies read Snow White.

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"I'm sorry, I blew my cover," the vampire said to his Paranormal Integration handler. "It was the blood oranges again."
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Re: Post your Twitfic Twabbles Here! (General Content)

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strawman wrote:Still have a quibble. "It has started" is only one thought, no?
Also a good point. I think I'll have to give up on this one. I have no quibble with your quabbles though so keep them coming! :)
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