To day your a man

100 word stories. Post all you like, maybe we'll dip in and use yours?
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Jmsbrtms
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To day your a man

Post by Jmsbrtms » Mon Dec 07, 2009 4:53 pm

I'm starting to appreciate the skill needed to write a Drabble.


“No.”

“No? You're telling your father No?”

“I’m 17. I’m not a kid anymore!”

He paused. Maybe, just maybe. “Before you storm out of here sit down for a second.”

“I’m going to that party next week.”

“You want to be an adult, that’s fine.”

“I can go?”

“You don’t have to ask my permission any more.”

“Thanks dad,” He stood up to leave.

“Hey hold on a second.” He shuffled around the desk. “Your car insurance is due.”

The young man looked at the papers. “It’s 300 dollars!”

“Yeah, looks like you need a job.” The father smiled.

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Re: To day your a man

Post by strawman » Mon Dec 07, 2009 5:45 pm

Ah. Teen Rock meets eternal hard place. The solution is rather pedestrian.
Never judge anyone until you have biopsied their brain.

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Re: To day your a man

Post by juliasd » Mon Dec 07, 2009 6:11 pm

That dad sounds eerily like my parents when I turned 18.

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Re: To day your a man (sic)

Post by Algernon Sydney is Dead » Mon Dec 07, 2009 8:59 pm

Good job telling a story.
But, the story is very commonplace and hence not too interesting.

Two nits:
I only count 99 words.
The title has typos. It should be: "Today you're a man".

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Re: To day your a man

Post by Jmsbrtms » Mon Dec 07, 2009 9:40 pm

Yeah it's a little dull. I was worried about it being too much a white room dialog.

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Re: To day your a man

Post by normsherman » Wed Dec 09, 2009 8:06 am

Haha, we're gonna have to formalize Dead Algy as official Drabble/Twitfic moderator.
Fun lil Drabble jmsbrtms, keep em comin
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