Susan didn’t like the way that the man in the cupcake thong was staring at her. His dead eyes never blinking as he watched her through the thick glass.
“It wouldn’t be so bad,” she said to no one in particular, “except every now and then he licks his lips.”
As if on cue, he ran his dry tongue over his dry lips, which did nothing to improve their already gray-green color.
She imagined the last horrific thought this flabby man must have had when he was finally attacked by the zombies.
”Oh god, why couldn’t I have been wearing sweatpants. “
Last Thoughts
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metalcapatiller
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Last Thoughts
CAPITAL letters are always the best way of dealing with things you don't have an answer to - Douglas Adams
Why is it that whenever I get "It's a Small World" stuck in my head, I need to sing it loudly and off-key?
Why is it that whenever I get "It's a Small World" stuck in my head, I need to sing it loudly and off-key?
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Re: Last Thoughts
OK, first of all, metalcapitiller is one epic name. (I'd say even beating out Bitey the Snake.) Second, "Susan didn’t like the way that the man in the cupcake thong was staring at her." is one epic opening sentence. Third, this is one whole epic drabble. Nice job. 
Many on the forum have asked me, so here's my answer: a spoonful of lighter fluid. And you'll need to wash it out really well when you're done.
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Re: Last Thoughts
Burrrilliant! From attention grabbing first line to grin inducing last. Very well written. 
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Re: Last Thoughts
A lesson to us all.
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metalcapatiller
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Re: Last Thoughts
I made my friends read this and they either backed away slowly or threatened to punch me... I thought it was hilarious. Thank you for enjoying the story and proving I'm not the only "weird" one out there
CAPITAL letters are always the best way of dealing with things you don't have an answer to - Douglas Adams
Why is it that whenever I get "It's a Small World" stuck in my head, I need to sing it loudly and off-key?
Why is it that whenever I get "It's a Small World" stuck in my head, I need to sing it loudly and off-key?
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pondspider
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Re: Last Thoughts
Have you tried exposing your friends to a Drabblecast podcast? They might have a change of heart... now there's an ideametalcapatiller wrote:I made my friends read this and they either backed away slowly or threatened to punch me... I thought it was hilarious. Thank you for enjoying the story and proving I'm not the only "weird" one out there
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Chairman Goodchild
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Re: Last Thoughts
You are on the right forum, my friend. And that is a pretty kick-ass Drabble.metalcapatiller wrote:I made my friends read this and they either backed away slowly or threatened to punch me... I thought it was hilarious. Thank you for enjoying the story and proving I'm not the only "weird" one out there